I really like how you’ve made a break in the usual English phrasing, and drop down to the second line. I always enjoy this kind of ‘double duty” between the first line as a complete thought and reading straight through to the next line. (hope I explained myself clearly!)
@Deborah I like to play with phrasings, to shake things up a bit, add a bit of ambiguity, or space for the reader to impose themselves onto and into the words.
I image the sounds of the rushing water that turns sand into rocks, and the crackling fire that turns it into glass … sort of like this poem, there is so much depth in the simplicity of life …
Yes, they do. Beautifully imagined.
What a lovely way of looking at it!
This is wonderful and told so simply.
I really like how you’ve made a break in the usual English phrasing, and drop down to the second line. I always enjoy this kind of ‘double duty” between the first line as a complete thought and reading straight through to the next line. (hope I explained myself clearly!)
Thank you for your comments everyone.
@Deborah I like to play with phrasings, to shake things up a bit, add a bit of ambiguity, or space for the reader to impose themselves onto and into the words.
I image the sounds of the rushing water that turns sand into rocks, and the crackling fire that turns it into glass … sort of like this poem, there is so much depth in the simplicity of life …
i’ve never thought of this form of ‘listening’. nicely done.
Wow! I love this visual – love it!