For some reason the last line embedded in paragraphs is what made the poem for me — can someone explain that mystery 🙂 I am not a punctuation person, maybe it made the phrase into a whispered secret? maybe it made it look optional, please replace here with your own reasons for being timetied? Either way, it pleased me greatly!
Thank you again everyone for your supportive feedback – it helps to keep me writing, and I’m very glad my work gives people pleasure. Haiku Tuna, you’ve nailed the way I like to write. Nonprescriptive, all interpretations and meanings optional. I have my own reasons for and meanings behind what I write, but I also like to leave the reader to lay my words on to themselves to make the poem their own. So, a whispered secret, optional for all – yes definately 🙂
lovely
A novel way to express high flying passion!
Timetied is a wonderful word. I enjoyed this. Thanks.
I love timetied! Aren’t we all?
minute twisted is a two-word song, just stunning.
For some reason the last line embedded in paragraphs is what made the poem for me — can someone explain that mystery 🙂 I am not a punctuation person, maybe it made the phrase into a whispered secret? maybe it made it look optional, please replace here with your own reasons for being timetied? Either way, it pleased me greatly!
“greedy for an hour” … now I can relate to this!
Love the inventive way you have with words, and the subject!
Thank you again everyone for your supportive feedback – it helps to keep me writing, and I’m very glad my work gives people pleasure. Haiku Tuna, you’ve nailed the way I like to write. Nonprescriptive, all interpretations and meanings optional. I have my own reasons for and meanings behind what I write, but I also like to leave the reader to lay my words on to themselves to make the poem their own. So, a whispered secret, optional for all – yes definately 🙂
🙂 this is really cute. timetied, minute twisted!
You had me stunbling in time with this delightful piece.
Nice work – the form fits perfectly the fleeting moments that are never enough, never.
Oh, this would be so great on a valentine!
It IS a great valentine! Thanks for this whimsical dance with time…very cool!
What a wonderful poem, so lilting! Thank you for sharing this.
now that kinda love is heavenly moments….
Nice your lines..greedy for an hour. I’ll remember that one.
super word choices
I like “time tied” and “greedy for an hour”